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A poem makes a small room in the front of the brain,
a thin, clean bundle of reasons against which

it lays its sermon like an offering of flowers.
I am moved and stopped by this syllogism, its bottomlessness.

In this case, the room is fashioned to seem like a streetcar.
Two passengers: Voltairine and me.

We don't say much. It is instead
this strange business of listening: for a cue,

an inward signal maybe, maybe a gun shot in the air.
Whichever it is, remember

we accused it of nothing. We paid it
no attention at all, and went on fashioning

the streetcar into a dining hall. One table:
Voltairine's and mine. Out of the kitchen swing door,

plates of king crab legs arrive on elaborate trays
carried by invisible women. We are used to this,

as Voltairine is by now used to my making use of her
for the sake of this poem. Look: she smiles,

cracking the crab legs, endlessly bending a rigid thumb
to hook out the lumps of meat.

It is a matter of convenience that this becomes
an act of oppression. I have her

under my thumb, and with little
to no apology. (Is this a marriage, then?

Is the lesson that having is, in action, always taking?)
At the candlelit table in the dining hall of this poem,

Voltairine fashions a series of hoops from the crab legs,
and I do for you whatever I've done.

In the theatrical release of this poem, the Earth
is projected on a nearby screen. It is spinning,

and is accompanied by the sound this makes in movies:
someone quietly pushing a very heavy stone across a stone floor.

And then the sun, daring and nearly mute,
a flame in a lantern, blackening.

This is to say Voltairine and I will be here,
in this room, for quite some time.

As if to say that again and again we unimagine ourselves
and then reanimate to fashion hoops from crab legs

and jump. Voltairine, I once bent an ear
to the pine forests of the North you mention.

They were tall and uncommunicating.
I don't think they liked me much.
:iconcogongrass:
So I went a little meta here, and a little referential. I’m not sure if you need to pick up on the actual references to “get it” (if you think so, please let me know). I wanted to take on another author’s text and incorporate its aesthetic as a kind of pallet, here, to use in exploring complications in readership and authorship. …Er? What this means is that I’m going to nervously over-explain myself here. Off I go.

Voltairine de Cleyre [link] was an American anarchist, feminist, and essayist. In her numerous texts on anarchism, she deals a lot with an isolated sense of self (isolated in the sense that a self is not inherently perceptible or accessible to anyone else). A lot of the imagery here comes from a section of her writing that explores this idea exactly, from her essay, “Anarchism.” It goes like this:

“Once and forever to realize that one is not a bundle of well-regulated little reasons bound up in the front room of the brain to be sermoinzed and held in order with copy-book maxims or moved and stopped by a syllogism, but a bottomless, bottomless depth of all strange sensations, a rocking sea of feeling wherever sweep strong storms of unaccountable hate and rage, invisible contortions of disappointment, low ebbs of meanness, quakings and shudderings of love that drives to madness and will not be controlled, hungerings and moanings and sobbing that smite upon the inner ear, now first bent to listen, as if all the sadness of the sea and the wailing of the great pine forests of the North had met to weep together there in that silence audible to you alone.”

For some of the other imagery: she goes on to say that, having encountered this “depth,” having acknowledged it in ourselves, we are obligated to acknowledge it also in others – in terms of her imagery, it is seeing it in the “fellow” sitting across from her in a “street-car.” Also, in terms of the marriage parenthetical, Voltairine hated, hated, hated marriage. She called it “sex slavery.” No big deal. For the whole gun shots and accusations bit, Voltairine was shot at point-blank range by someone intending to assassinate her, but she survived and, holding to her anarchical principles, refused to testify against or accuse him. No bigger deal. Much of the other images (crab legs, Earth, sun) are just my wonky contributions.

Okay. So there’s an excessive amount of information for you. I’m hoping the poem carries without the need for all of that, but I’ll leave that to you. I’ve lost a bit of objectivity here (too much reading!), which I guess is weirdly appropriate, considering. And so, as always but maybe particularly in the case, I’d love to hear your thoughts. (:

Also, I think I should completely mess the form up in this one. These couplets aren’t appropriate. Right?

Thanks for reading!
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:iconbraboanarcho:
~BraboAnarcho Mar 22, 2013  New member
Trees are always friendly if the wind let them be...
If we hear carefully, we can hear their poetry..

Greetings
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:iconarchelyxs:
Your work is so beautiful.
These concise and self-contained snippets of the world, your playful repetition and liberality of image, the authority in your tone,
you have a tremendous voice and tremendous things to say. I will see you pushing currents in this world
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:iconcogongrass:
Thank you!! (:
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=AzizrianDaoXrak Apr 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I had no idea who Voltairine was. However, in the context of the piece, I really didn't care - they are simply another character. The references certainly make sense after reading your comments, but I don't think we really need all that to enjoy the piece :)
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:iconcogongrass:
Awesome. Yeah, prolly over-analyzed a bit, ehehe. Thank you!!
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:iconwreckling:
$wreckling Apr 18, 2012   Writer
While I laughed hysterically at the typo in "plates of king crap legs arrive on elaborate trays", I do believe you meant crab. :P I'm very much torn by "the dining hall of this poem", because on the one hand I love it and I feel it's definitely a necessary part of the poem, and on the other I found it incredibly distracting from the fact that I was present in the poem itself. That's probably not a good way to describe it, and it may well be what you were going for in the first place. I'm not suggesting you take it out, though, since it really is a great phrase and fits the context so well, so ultimately that's pointless musing on my part. As far as the outside information goes, I don't think it's all that necessary. I got the sense of isolation just fine without realizing that was your intent, so I think it's just fine. I really like this poem overall, though. The couplets give the poem a sense of calm that lends to that feeling of isolation, I think. Really well done, as always. :]
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:iconcogongrass:
Oh man, I almost want to keep "king crap legs" now -- pretty sure Freud or somesuch would have a ball (aha) with that. Hysterical laughter a "must" response to that little typo. Well done, subconscious...

And yeah, I definitely wanted to play with readers' being present in the poem, but only just enough, you know? So I'm glad you mention that line standing out a bit in a distracting way (it's not a pointless musing!) -- it'll be a good starting point for me to consider when I come back to this with my editor's cap on. (: Glad too, that all the information isn't overly necessary. It's fun to provide, but at the end of the day it's a little more heartening when a poem can stand on its own, eh?

Thank you for this!! (:
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